Author: Bob

Most of the editing is wrapping up on the second novel. The scenes have been laid out and characters assessed. The last part will be adding weather to the story. “Shouldn’t that already be done?” you ask. Some bits, perhaps, but now the real weather work begins.

It is very easy to get wrapped up in all the details of a setting. When that happens, those details can slow the pace of the scene. On the other hand, a scene can fly by so quickly that the reader has no idea what is going on with the setting. Weather is one of those things that can get in the way or can help.

On the first draft, weather was only mentioned if it had a direct impact on the action. In those cases, the story would not make sense without explaining the effect of the weather. You don’t want to forget about that while planning to add it later. What about the rest of the weather?

There is a lot of emotive potential to properly used atmospheric phenomena. We tend to associate sadness with cloudy days or happiness with the sun in spring. Refugees on a long slog down the road are that much more miserable with a downpour. We should take advantage of these things, but we must do so without making it a weather forecast.

As mentioned in an earlier post, I make a list of all my scenes and what happens in them. This helps me check the continuity of my story. The next use for that list is to map out the weather. I’ll make note of any scenes where the weather was already defined. Then, I’ll plot out what the weather should be in order to augment the emotive potential of those scenes.

The pattern to the weather will follow the story arc. There is the initial disruption where stories start, the changes, the character growth, etc. We know those things follow a pattern, within reason. The weather should support that. The story is about the character’s world, and that should be shown in all aspects of that world.

Of course, your story may need something different. For example, you may have a character who is sad about something on a very pleasant day to show that the world goes on despite the character’s plight. Every story and author will use these things differently, but it must be given some thought.

After mapping the weather, I’ll have to apply it to the story. It must be subtle, never disrupting the flow of the writing itself. Noting how a street light reflects off the wet pavement tells you that it has recently finished raining. Characters can be uncomfortable because of the humidity and the sun beating down on them. The same sun, without the humidity shows a pleasant day. These are the sorts of things that use the weather to add depth to the story world but not disrupt the story itself.

The first draft is complete and now the technical part starts. I’ve gotten a little of that done, but will have to wait until the end of the semester to really start working. It shouldn’t take too long though; I learned a lot from the first novel.

My first step was to print the first draft on paper. I’m old fashioned and rely on my reading glasses. That gave me chance to read through and make notes of things that needed changed. The notes cover the obvious editing issues, but also include comments about story or character weaknesses that need to be addressed.

Once the paperwork was done, I started transfering the editing to the electronic version. I made a new copy of the document so I wouldn’t risk damaging the original. As a computing professional, I cannot stress how important it is to make backups and to have restore points.

While working this second draft, I started a couple of new documents and opened another for editing. The new ones include a chapter/scene list and a list of locations. The existing one was the character list. These tools are a great help when making sure I didn’t do anything stupid.

The chapter or scene list is a list of the chapters in my book in the order in which they appear in the text. Most chapters are attached to a single scene, with a few exceptions. This list includes the time when the event happened in the story, the title of that chapter, and any other important notes. This helps be double check the timing in the story world to keep it consistent and realistic. The titles help make sure I don’t use the same title more than once and to make sure they don’t form an unfortunate pattern.

The location list also helps with consistency. Each location has a name and any necessary notes. This lets the characters visit places repeatedly while not messing up the details. Once I’m done with the second draft, I will do an Internet search to see if the place names show up. Any that do may be renamed to avoid conflicts and rights issues. Since any name will be consistent throughout the novel, it will be relatively easy to use the find feature to replace the old name with the new.

On the Barnes and Noble website, a reader comment for the first novel mentioned that some of the character names gave a little confusion because there were too many of them. That won’t be the case in the second. There are fewer characters. Also, the name list allows me to review the names to make sure each is sufficiently different. For example, there is an important character named Harv, but there was a minor character named Marv. This posed a confusion risk, so Marv found himself renamed. Without the character list, this may have been more difficult to see. If I really wanted to look things over, I could use a SOUNDEX function, but I’m a little lazy.

Those initial fixes will be good, but there will need to be some larger changes too. I noticed that some of the scenery lacked depth to a notable degree. There are things I want to add to help with the main guy’s character arc. The first draft was about sixty thousand words, but the new material will take it closer to seventy. That’s a good, readable size for the casual reader.

It’s only a few weeks until the end of the semester. I think I’m in a good place to get this finished and polished before the middle of summer. If my artist comes through on the cover, this could be rolling off the press in a few months.

Though my work schedule has been tight, aggravated by winter weather delays, I’ve found a little time to work on the follow-up to Cordell’s Rebellion. There are only a couple of scenes to complete and the first draft will be done. The excitement is building.

The notes and outlines for the remaining scenes have been written for some time. The current work is to put them into a narrative format. The notes for the final scene are so extensive that it is almost ready to paste in as though complete. With these scenes finished, then the next steps begin.

Mapping and Checking

With the first draft finished, my next steps have to do with maps, charts, and lists. I will map out the dates and places to make sure they make sense and that there aren’t any continuity issues. I will also map out any character arcs with the scenes. This makes sure the waypoints on the character’s personal journey are spread evenly and that there aren’t any magic jumps or back-tracks.

This is also the point where I make sure the names are consistent. Not just character names, but I will list out places, streets, and anything else that has a name. It’s also a good time to verify that I didn’t subconsciously appropriate a name from some other author or from history. I’ve already caught myself switching between “Harv” and “Herb” for one character and picking the name of an actor for another. I will also look for characters whose names are too similar to each other since that can confuse some readers.

Second Draft

Once all the mapping is complete, I can dig into the second draft to make all the needed changes. In this version, I will fix any issues revealed in the mapping phase. I will also work on the language, attempting to make everything concise while carrying more emotive and physical information.

I will also read much of the material aloud to make sure it flows well. In some cases, I may print a copy and mark the meter much like you would a poem. This becomes important in scenes with faster action. A slow-metered sentence or two in a fast paced scene can ruin the scene. On the other hand, too much speed can really throw off suspense.

The word search feature of the software is a great way to find the word “had”. Like many midwesterners, I use “had” far too often. It shows up in my writing and must make a conscious effort to avoid it. Many instances of that word can be removed without altering the meaning of the sentence. Of course, if it shows up in the speech of a character, it may need to stay just to flesh out their manner of communication.

After That

After the second draft, I can hand it over to my editing gurus and bribe them to give it the once over. That should, and I mean should, be the end of it. A little polishing here or there and it will be ready for the press.

The feedback on my last cover was neither positive or negative, but I really prefer positive. A graphic artist friend has shown preliminary drawings for the new book and things will go well there. She will get paid and get to add a book cover to her portfolio. It’s a benefit to both of us. If things go right, she may be able to help with the third book as well (I have notes for seven books in this series).

I just have to maintain the momentum and get all of this done. I also need to work on the promotion side a little more. That’s a different story.

One of the problems of print-on-demand publishing is that you don’t get all the support that comes with a publisher-driven launch. Even though my novel is through the Barnes and Noble Press, I’m still responsible for the initial promotion. That made it more exciting when I got my first customer review on the Barnes and Noble website.

The anonymous reviewer gave my book five stars and described it as “Not a typical storyline pick for me…” This illustrates some of the difficulties I’ve had getting people interested in my novel. It is difficult to put it into a category but still has some nice pieces (so I think). Telling people, “This is different from what you like to read but you should give it a chance,” just doesn’t motivate them.

Because the reviewer was anonymous, I’m not sure how much weight to give it. Was it one of my friends? Was it a relative? On the other hand, a couple of weeks ago I sent out a bunch of gratis copies to the Bishops of the African Methodist Episcopal Church (those in the continental United States) because their church inspired some of the characters in one of the subplots. Could one of these copies have resulted in the review?

Either way, I’m a bit giddy about seeing the review. It’s an awesome thing. Now I just need a few thousand more, preferably accompanied by actual sales.

As part of my writing, and because I’m a data person, I always wonder about the structure of language. In grad school I had to write a simple search engine (similar to Google) and learned about taking documents apart and determining word frequencies. Just recently, though, I learned about a neat concept called Zipf’s Law and how it relates to, among other things, word distribution in both written works and entire languages.

For reference, I got hooked on this idea based on two YouTube videos:

How Some Words Get Forgetted https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tFW7orQsBuo

The Zipf Mysteryhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fCn8zs912OE

For the most part, this is just a curiosity for me. I’m not planning to change my writing based on the statistical characteristics. Where I thought this would be most useful is in world building when there are new or evolved languages.

I have a world I have been building since high school. I’ve worked on it extensively, creating great detail for about a thousand years of its history. Where the great Professor Tolkien built his world to work with languages, my world was built to play with the spread and change of religious beliefs. Later, I looked into the economics of the world as well.

One of the things that I wondered about as a background sort of thing, was the changes of the languages. The world starts out as our current world after a severe cataclysm (an extremely unoriginal idea). Different peoples meet and their languages have to blend and then change over the thousand years. I understood that the culture of these people would determine which words were important and which were common, daily words.

The concepts in these two videos, and subsequent readings, made me start wondering about the word distributions of my peoples. For example, most of the thousand years involved an ongoing war in one region. How many of their most common words would have to do with conflict and defense, as opposed to simple food production? How would these distributions compare with the distributions of people on the other side of the continent where war was less of an issue?

Honestly, I probably will not go through the trouble to develop the languages of these people for my writing. The stories would be written in my Iowan English anyway, so at most I would just pick a few terms to translate for color. Even so, I may want to consider how the characters phrase certain ideas to reflect their underlying language.